A REMARKABLE DAY

Have you ever felt really inspired, motivated and hungry for more? I'll tell your a brief story. Once upon a time, there was a young man that used to try to understand himself; he was constantly asking questions such as: Who am I? What I am looking for? Which degree should I take? Does friendship matter? Does she really love me? What is next? When this young man returned to his home after a long day, he used to play guitar, write as much as he could and listen to Nirvana when he was sad, and Guns N' Roses when he was feeling like a bad person! What a dreamer was; locked in his own world! Within his mind there were dreams, into his heart there was a strong energy which inspired him. Time was going by; he hadn't understood who he was until he stopped thinking too much and started enjoying each day; carpe diem! Did she really love him? No, she didn't, because she wasn't a real love, she was important, and part of his life for a while, but not an eternal feeling. He found that answer while thoroughly reading* (*reading thoroughly is still correct but slightly less natural sounding in my opinion) a short book called "Symposium"; a dialogue by Plato. What about friendship? Well, during his Sociology classes he became skeptical about it, however it quickly changed, instead of blaming the world or isolating himself from the world he understood that our society is massively based* (*again, there's nothing wrong with "based massively" but I believe massively based sounds more natural) in "kindness begets kindness"; he became an optimistic* man (*or he became an optimist), he didn't wait forsomething in return (in order)to do a good action or have a good attitude; it was a kind of thanksgiving every single day. When he wasn't in a good mood he climbed the mountains, rode a bike or took long walks. Didn't he failed? Lose his mind? Or act like such a d*** or a fool? For sure, sometimes; who doesn't? But, he learned how to get over it all. It's not easy; guess what? It takes time. All right, "are you pursuing your dreams?" Are you doing all that you want?" Those questions were written in his private room* (*do you mean bedroom?), precisely on his wall; it was like a rule! Buddy, you wrote it all and what about the remarkable day? Everyday is a remarkable day, you might think "What a genious" or "NO, REALLY?!" What I mean is that everyone, no matter how bad or good it was, made your day remarkable, it may be your wife, your children, your neighbor that invited your to a special barbecue or simply your animal that seemed to become a human because of your feelings. Hold on! Which degree did our protagonist take? He's still taking it! It's called life; all those moments were part of a unique degree, the most special experience. If you read my text until now; congratulations. What's next? I don't know, do you?

A REMARKABLE DAY

Have you ever felt so inspired, motivated and hunger for more? I'll tell your a brief story. Once upon a time, there was a young man that used to try to understand himself. He was constantly making questions such as: Who am I? What I am looking for? Which degree should I take? Does friendship matter? Does she really love me? What is next? When this young man returned to his home after a long day, he used to play guitar, write as much as he could and listen Nirvana when he was sad, and Guns N' Roses when he was feeling like a bad boy! What a dreamer was locked in his own world! Within his mind there were dreams, into his heart there was a strong energy responsible to inspire him. Time passing going by. He hadn't understood who he was until stop thinking too much and start enjoying each day, carpe diem! Did she really love him? No, she didn't, because she wasn't a real love, she was important, and part of his life for a while, not an eternal feeling. He found that answer reading thoroughly a short book called "Symposium" a dialogue by Plato. What about friendship? Well, during his Sociology classes he became skeptical about it, however it quickly changed, instead of blaming the world or closing his own world he understood that our society is based massively in "kindness begets kindness" he became an optimist man, he didn't wait something in return during a good action or attitude, it was a kind of thanksgiving every single day. When he wasn't in mood he climbed the mountains, ride a bike or took long walks. Didn't he failed? Lose his mind? or was acting such a d*** or fool? For sure, sometimes, who doesn't? But, he learned how to get over it all. It's not easy, guess what? It takes time. All right, are you pursuing your dreams? are you doing all that you want? Those questions were written in his private room, precisely in his wall, it was like a rule! Buddy, you wrote it all and what about the remarkable day? Everyday is a remarkable day, you might think "What a genious or NO, REALLY?! What I mean is that everyone no matter how bad or good it was, made your day remarkable, it may be your wife, your children, your neighbor that invited your to a special barbacue or simply your animal that became a human because of your feelings. Hold on! Which degree did our protagonist take? He's taking! It's called life, all those moments were part of a unique degree, the most special experience. If you read my text until now, congratulations. What's next? I don't know, do you?

I did not correct all but some. You are using sentences incorrectly. Look up the grammatical concept of a comma splice. You are commiting that error.