My hometown

I live in a very big city in China, and it is the capital city, Beijing. Maybe some of you have been there before?,What do you like about it? or what do you dislike unsatisfied about it? ForIn my own opinion, Bejing is a international city, and there are lots of people. I had herad a news report (maybe a joke) said that said some American people came to Beijing to cure their mental depression, because they feel so lonely in Amercia, as there are fewer people where they livearound their home.
However, having so many lots of people also brings many problems to Beijing, such as traffic jams、limited resources and conflicts. Although it will take a long time to solve these problems, I still love this big big city.

Unsatisfied - if you really want to use unsatisified you could say "What do you feel unsatisfied about?"

"In my opinion" or "For my part" are ok, but "For my own opinion" sounds a little strange.

"So many people" emphasises the number of people are great as in there are "too many people" whilst "lots of people" gives a more neutral tone. So as you write about problems related to the number of people "so many" maybe more appropriate.

Anyway good one!