A short tale
That morning he woke up with a frigthening feeling. As if the whole world were waiting for his decision. Happy day or bad day. Move forward or give up. The first step would decide it.
Slowly, he stood up. He would never remember which foot was the first in touching the frozen floor, because the only thing that will remain in his head forever would be that song. It was a strange morning trill he couldn´t recognise. And the decision was made. That day was the first day of his new life.
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A short tale
That morning he woke up with a frightening feeling. As if the whole world were waiting for his decision. Happy Good day or bad day. Move forward or give up. The first step would decide it.
Slowly, he stood up. He would never remember which foot was the first in touching first to touch the frozen floor, because the only thing that will would remain in his head forever would be that song. It was a strange morning trill he couldn´t recognise. And the decision was made. That day was the first day of his new life.
Very well written. Grammatically, it looks fine. I have made some suggestions in blue/grey which I think would make it sound more natural.
One other note: "Happy" and "Sad" go together, as do "Good" and "Bad". So while "Happy day or good day" is grammatically correct, you would normally say either:
"Happy day or sad day" or
"Good day or bad day"
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