I just started today with italki!

Hello world! This is my first note here in italki. I work with computers here in Rome, the "eternal" city. One of my hobbies is practising ice figure skating. Since this year, I also do challenges in adult competitions!
I will be short here, so you could help me quickly.
Thank you very much. Bye!
Silvia

Correction

I Just Joined Italki!

Hello world! This is my first note on italki. I work with computers in Rome, the "eternal" city. I enjoy ice figure skating. Since the beginning of this year, I have been participating in ice figure skating competitions! 

I will be brief. Can you help me improve my English?

Thank you very much! Bye 

Silvia

I just started today with italki!

 (or I just began using italki today)

Hello world! This is my first note here in on italki. I work with computers here in Rome, the "eternal" city. One of my hobbies is practising ice figure skating. Since the beginning of this year, I also do challenges take part in adult competitions!
I will be short brief here, so you could help me quickly. (or it wouldn't take long to help me)
Thank you very much. Bye!
Silvia