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2009年是本集團發展史上具有里程碑意義的一年，是企業與時俱進、鑄就輝煌的一年，更是企業銳意進取、實現跨越式發展的一年。從年初開始，國內電力建設可以說是一路狂飆，發電設備的訂貨出現了井噴行情。本公司抓住這大好機遇，注重戰略，精心策劃，重點出擊，不僅實現了新增訂單的大豐收，還簽訂了一批具有戰略意義的重要合同。
The year of 2009 was a milestone in the development of the Group. In this year, The Group modernized and made significant achievements. In this year, We also forged ahead with determinations and developed by strides. From the beginning of 2009, development of domestic electricity infrastructure increased dramatically, and orders for power generating equipments increased proportionally. By taking advantage of this good opportunity, focusing on strategies, and good planning and focusing on the key points, the Group not only received a lot of additional orders, but also strategically signed a series of strategic contracts.

Sorry to make so many marks.  It is really hard to make credible English sentences when you translate directly from Chinese.  Maybe this is a good illustration of the difference between Chinese and western business communication.  In the west, unsubstantiated self praise is looked upon with skepticism.  Here is a version that sounds more credible to me.

"2009 was an exciting year in the evolution of The Group.  It was in this year that The Group was able to fully capitalize on the surge in China's economic development and acheive substatial growth.  From the beginning of 2009, development of domestic electric infrastructure increased dramically, and orders for power generation equipement grew poportionaly. The Group was able to take advantage of this opportunity due to prior strategic investments and good planning.  Not only did they  increase revenue and orders, but it was in this year that The Group signed a series of strategic contracts that made it possible to sustain dramic growth during the subsequent 5 years."