TOEFL essay - In general, people are living longer now.
"In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay."
In 2015, in the well-developed country, people live until an average age of 75 years old. Everybody knows that was not always true by the past. During centuries, people are living more and more longer. This phenomenon can be explained by many reasons. In my essay, I will give you my point of view about the few main reasons who explain this.
The first and the most significant reason are the progress in medicine. A lot of very famous scientific are realized a great discovers who contribute largely of the evolution of the medicine. By example, Hyppocrates discovered microbe and wrote a range of rules about well-practice for increase health. Or Louis Pasteur, who imagined the process of vaccination. Still today, who use vaccination for protect young children against a large range of disease. And Ambroise Paré, a most famous French surgeon, whose the work contributed of the evolution of the surgery. Further, now we know better the causes and the treatments of the most diseases.
Secondly, the quality of the life is better than in the past. The most people drink some good water without microbe and pollution. People eat their fill and the products are less dangerous and more nutritive. Furthermore, in the most country the hygiene is better. For instance, people take regularly a bath or a shower, we wash our hands. And when we are sick we go at the doctor and we doesn’t propagate the disease. With all this little things, we diminish the microbes and we protect himself against problems.
In my point of view, this two main reasons explain largely why people are living longer now than the past.
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TOEFL essay - In general, people are living longer now.
"In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay."
In 2015, in the well-developed countries, people live until an average age of up to 75 years old. Everyone (''everybody'' c'est correct, mais ''everyone'' est plus formal) knows that was not always so in true by the past. During Over the centuries, people have been are living longer and longer. . This phenomenon can be explained by many reasons. In my essay, I will give you my point of view about the few / main (choisiez un mot) reasons who that explain this.
The first and the most significant reason are is the progress advances in medicine. A lot of very famous scientific scientists have are made realized a great discoveries which who contributed largely significantly of to the evolution of the medicine. By For example, Hyppocrates discovered microbes, and wrote a range of rules about good-practices for increasing health. Also, Or Louis Pasteur, who imagined (qui imagine ou qui invente/develope?) the process of vaccination. Still today, who we use vaccination for protecting young children against a large range of disease. Then there is Ambroise Paré, a most very famous French surgeon, whose the work contributed of to the evolution of the surgery. Furthermore, now we know better the causes and the treatments of the most diseases.
Secondly, the quality of the life is better than in the past. The Most people drink some good water without microbes and pollution. People eat their fill (qu'est ce que tu as voulu dire ici) and the products are less dangerous and more nutritive nutritious. Furthermore, in the most countries the level of hygiene is better. For instance, people regularly take regularly a bath or a shower and we wash our hands. And when we are sick we go at the doctor and we doesn’t don't propagate the disease. With all this these little things, we diminish destroy the microbes and we protect ourselves himself against illness / complication problems.
In my From my point of view, this these are the two main reasons that greatly explain largely why people are living longer now than in the past.
très intéresant ! (y)
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