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A Good Memory of Student Life
Hi, This is a sweet memory when I was student in bachelor of science an undergraduate student in Qazvin. We were Five of us boys who had rented a large house. We had a landlord who was old man and very kind.
One winter night in winter, it was snowing and was very cold. I usually wear light clothes. One of my friends and I had slept on in one of a room. At midnight, I felt my body who is hot, so I got up, and opened the window and then went back to bed. After several minutes, I woke up again and I found it that the windows was closed. For second time, I got up and opened the window. When I was going back to bed, my friend said me, :"Why do you open the window. It's cold". I said told him, "I'm hot, and I can't sleep. Please use one more another blanket and don't close the window."
He didn't accept it, and so we had a funny challenge for opening and closing the window.
At Finally, I got up and separated the window from its hinges and put it in the commode bathroom :D . My friend had been thinking for several minutes and then I sea saw him who separated the door of the room from its hinges and put it front of the window :D.
Whenever I remember that night, it's sweet.
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A funny story, dear Hossein. Both you and your friend seem to have a nice sense of humor! :)
I don't understand how this sentence fits in the story: I usually wear light clothes.
First, it is in an awkward place. I would write it this way:
One of my friends and I had slept in one room. Although I usually wear light clothes, at midnight I felt hot, so I got up, opened the window and then went back to bed.
A comma after window is optional.
Any corrections/ suggestions I made are my opinion following standard written American English.
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