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a good memory of student life Hi,This is a sweet memory when i was student in bachelor of science in Qazvin. We were five boys who had rented a large house. We had a landlord who was old man and very kind. One night in winter, It was snowing and very cold. I usually wear light clothes. One of my friends and I had slept on one of a room. At midnight, I felt my body who is hot, So I got up and open the window and then went back to bed. After several minute I woke up again and I found it that windows was closed.For second time, I got up and opened the window. When I was going back to bed,my friend said me :"Why do you open the window,It's cold". I said him:"I'm hot and I can't sleep. Please use one more blanket and Don't close the window". He didn't accept it and we had a funny challenge for opening and closing window. At finally, I got up and separated window from hinges and put it at commode :D . My friend had been thinking for several minutes and then I sea him who separated Door of the room from hinges and put it front of the window :D. Whenever I remember That night ,It's sweet.

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A Good Memory of Student Life

Hi, This is a sweet memory when I was student in bachelor of science an undergraduate student in Qazvin. We were Five of us boys who had rented a large house. We had a landlord who was old man and very kind.
One winter night in winter, it was snowing and was very cold. I usually wear light clothes. One of my friends and I had slept on in one of a room. At midnight, I felt my body who is hot, so I got up, and opened the window and then went back to bed. After several minutes, I woke up again and I found it that the windows was closed. For second time, I got up and opened the window. When I was going back to bed, my friend said me, :"Why do you open the window. It's cold". I said told him, "I'm hot, and I can't sleep. Please use one more another blanket and don't close the window."
He didn't accept it, and so we had a funny challenge for opening and closing the window.
At Finally, I got up and separated the window from its hinges and put it in the commode bathroom :D . My friend had been thinking for several minutes and then I sea saw him who separated the door of the room from its hinges and put it front of the window :D.
Whenever I remember that night, it's sweet.

 

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A funny story, dear Hossein.  Both you and your friend seem to have a nice sense of humor!  :)

I don't understand how this sentence fits in the story: I usually wear light clothes.

First, it is in an awkward place.  I would write it this way:


One of my friends and I had slept in one room. Although I usually wear light clothes, at midnight I felt hot, so I got up, opened the window and then went back to bed.


A comma after window is optional.

Any corrections/ suggestions I made are my opinion following standard written American English.

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