Travelog: Visiting The Former Residence Of A Famous Writer And Shen Garden
On Oct 1st, I went to the city of Shaoxing by train with my husband. We stayed there one day and visited two attractions.
It was already 2pm when we arrived at the train station that day, when therefore we only went to one attraction that day, the former residence of Luxun, a famous writer and patriot in Chinese history. That was the first time we had visited the city, so it took quite a while for us to get to the attraction. The attraction is free of charge. It covers a large area and it took us almost three hours to finish the tour. We visited Luxun's bedroom, study where he studied during the period of his 12-year-old to 17-year-old, photo gallary showcasing his works, and the playing garden where he played with his little friends in his childhood, and other locations of his former residence.
The next day, we went to Shen Garden, a large graden which is full of water and artificial hills and were famous for visits of a historic poet and patriot LuYou. We had visited the visit by 2pm and then took a bus to the train station. The train station was not as crowed as we thought.
This travel is good overral, except for the hotel, which was ordered online and the service of which was not satisfying as we had expected.
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Travelog: Visiting The Former Residence Of A Famous Writer And Shen Garden
On Oct 1st, I went with my husband by train to the city of Shaoxing by train (here 'by train' is not wrong, but 'means' before 'destination' is a little better) with my husband. We stayed there one day and visited two attractions.
It was already 2pm when we arrived at the train station that day, when and therefore we only went/could only go to one attraction that day - (needs the 'dash rather than a comma) the former residence of Luxun (a famous writer and patriot in Chinese history). That/Since it was the first time we had visited the city, so (omit 'so' if you write 'Since it') it took quite a while for us to get to the attraction (which The attraction is free of charge). It covers a large area and it took us almost three hours to finish the tour. We visited Luxun's bedroom, the study/room (to avoid two 'study's) where he studied during the period of his between the ages of 12 and 17 12-year-old to 17-year-old, a photo gallery showcasing his works, and the playing (repetitive) garden where he played with his little friends in his childhood, and some other locations of his former residence.
The next day, we went to Shen Garden, a large garden which is full of water features and artificial hills, (comma separates this 'and' from the previous 'and') and which (to connect to 'gardens', not to 'hills') were famous for visits of a historic poet and patriot LuYou. We had visited finished the visit by 2pm and then took a bus to the train station. The train station was not as crowded as we thought.
This travel trip was good overall, except for the hotel, which was ordered booked online and - the service of which there was not satisfactory as we had expected.
Some complex issues of long sentences and multiple clauses, of punctuation and parenthesis! Excellent English however. Read about use of comma, dash and parentheses!
http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/dashes-parentheses-and-commas
http://www.thepunctuationguide.com/em-dash.html
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