請注意：寫英文的時候，每一個標點符號的後邊需要加一個空格。

我注意到，中文字體的標點包括含有空格，但是英文的需要特別打一個空格。所以中國人不習慣打空格！

你的英文非常好，堅持下去！加油！

Celebrating the coming of winter

In China, there is a festival called the Winter Solstice, which celebrates the coming of winter. People from different places have their own special ways to celebrate it. As far as I know, on that day most Cantonese will eat Tangyuan, which is a circular and sweet food made of glutinous rice flourI.  Some people will put some fillings inside, such as sesame seed(s), peanut(s), red bean(s), fruit jam and so on. All kinds of them (或 All kinds）are very delicious! I'm glad to say that yesterday was the  for (或on) Winter Solstice, many of my classmates got together to celebrate it .We made Tangyuan by ourselves, but honestly, most of us were the it was the first time for must of us to learn to make Tangyuan. So it was really a big challenge for us. Some of us made Tangyuan too small or too big, others couldn't made it looks like a circular look round, so they made some special shaped Tangyuan, which were cute. The most interesting thing was that we put the glutinious rice (sticky rice) flour on each others' faces, then they became white-faced clowns. All of us were clapping and laughing heartily. That was an unforgettable night， and I have not so happy for a long time!

Celebration of  the coming of winter

In China,there is a festival named the Winter Solstice,which celebrates the coming of winter.People from different places have their own special ways of celebrating it .As far as I know, on this day most Cantonese will eat Tangyuan,which is a circular and sweet food made of glutinous rice flourI.Some people will put some fillings inside,such as sesame,peanut,red bean,fruit jam and so on.All kinds of them are very delicious! I'm glad to say that yesterday there was the Winter Solstice, lots of my classmates got together to celebrate it .We made Tangyuan by ourselves,but honestly,  it was the first experience of cooking Tangyuan for most of us .So it was really a big challenge .Some of us made Tangyuan too snall or too big, others couldn't make it  circular,so they made some special shapes of Tangyuan, which were cute.The most interesting thing was that we put the glutinious rice flour on others' faces,then they became White face clown.All of us were clasing and laughing heartily.That was an unforgettable night and I have not been happier for a long time!

I am not sure that all of my corrections are absolutely right,but I've given you some ideas how to make this text better)