Hong Kong Disneyland

To visit Hong Kong Disneyland  is  has been  a desire of my daughter  for  a few years ago. The wish came true at last  in  August this year. That day we watched a lot of programs including Stitch Encounter, A Small World, The Golden Mickeys, The Many Adventures Of Winnie The Pooh, Tarzan's Treehouse, Festival Of The Lion King,  and  Street  Entertainment [1]. We also played  Map  Mad  Hatter Tea Cups and Cinderella Carousel. Finally  W  we watched the fireworks. That day we  had  were  really tired, but  it's  it was  worth  it.

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[1] I am not sure about "Street Entertainment".  Did you mean "Main Street"?  Or did you mean general "street entertainment"?  Please notice that if it is a name, you use capital letters ("Main Street").  If you were using a general noun phrase, you do not use capital letters ("street entertainment").

Hong Kong Disneyland

To visit Hong Kong Disneyland with my daughter  was my desire a few years ago.

The wish came true at last August this year.2013 or 2014 ?

That day we watched a lot of programs including Stitch Encounter, A Small World,The Golden Mickeys, The Many Adventures Of Winnie The Pooh, Tarzan's Treehouse,Festival Of The Lion King, and Street Entertainment. We also played Map Hatter Tea Cups and Cinderella Carousel. Finally, we watched the fireworks. That day we were really tired, but it was worth it.

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