New Technology

Thirty years ago, who had to say would have said that we would be (so) dependent of on mobile phones and the internet.

On the one handFirst*, let me write about mobile phones. Nowadays, most people have (got) a mobile phone. In particular,ly young people do. They can’t live without it. Do you think that you can could live without your mobile? I think so. I am sure, that I would find it hard because I use my mobile phone for a wide variety of things. For instance, to send or receive messenges, (to) listen to music and (to) surf the internet. Moreover, you can download a lot of apps such as sat nav GPS, [2] dictionaries or a great many games.

On the other hand Now, I am going to write about the internet. It has been a wonderful discovery. It is already an intrinsic part of in our lives,. Pparticularly over with young people. But all things have advantages and disadvantages. From my point of view, the internet has some series of {or "a series of", but not both "some" and "series of" together} advantages. For examples, it is easy the for communication [3], it is possible to get to know and exchange conversations converse with people of from other countries through social networks. You can look {better word: search} for information about something the fast way quickly, without the need for you go to the library. But also, You can also download free software. However, it has some disadvantages as well, such as the students try hard putting in less effort to with homework due to their ability to copy (answers) on the internet. In addition, it creates dependency and addiction. Lastly, but not least important,[4] is that internet is the main source piracy.

To conclude, I think that new technologies have something good and bad about them. They do make our life more comfortable. Although alsoHowever, they have made us dependent on a machine.

[1] "On the one hand/on the other hand" is not really the appropriate prepositional phrase pairing to use here because you're not comparing or contrasting. Just enumerate here: first, second, etc.

[2] If this is a proper noun (the name of the app), it needs to be capitalized, Sat Nav. If you mean a generic "satellite navigation system" app, then it's lowercase, or use the acronym GPS (global positioning system).

[3] Or do you mean: "it simplifies communication"?

[4] You don't need the "but not least important" here, it's a writing flourish. But if you want to keep it, then you should emphasize it: "Lastly, but certainly not least important..."