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Skills Profile

I am a hard-working and highly self-motivated person (1) with excellent organisational and great
time management skills who always takes care in what they do, and I am someone who
puts in all their effort into every project.
I have excellent interpersonal skills and a proven ability to build strong and
productive relationships and networks both internally and externally. I also have a positive attitude towards learning, growth, personal health Initiative (2), energy and
persistence to get the job done
I am looking for a full time job in a restaurant, such as assistant cook, to improve my skills
and knowledge. I’m also looking for jobs as a waiter too.

(1) Or you can say "I am ahard-working and highly self-motivated, with excellent..."

(2) As an employer, unless you are applying to a gym, why would I care if you have a positive attitude towards exercise?