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Graduation Day (I) The eighteente of June is the Graduation Day.Many students cried on that day because they were going to leave their friends for a long time or even forever.Of course I didn't want to leave them too,but just l little. Some of the students signed their names on the school uniforms each other for marking the occasion before they leaved.But school director stood against with them.He said that where you signed,he would use a pair of sissors to cut it where you mark.He threatened us that we had no dare to sign.But strangely,there were still a few students didn't obey what he said.In my opinion,it is all right to sign because of the final day that they probably had no chance to meet each other longer,isn't it? On gradution day,before we went into the hall,schoolmaster let us walked around the school to enjoy the view like trees,playground for the last time.While we walked pass the trees and trees,suddenly there was a sad music playing somewhere.I don't know who played it,but one thing I sure was that the music was so 'magical' that it made some of the students cried while they walked.(hhaaa!!) I thaught it isn't nessery to play the music!What is nesseryto catched the sad context to cried them out XD?~ When we got into the hall,we were busy giving gifts to our friends or signing on the special manuals instead of uniforms.But some students didn't prepare gifts!Of course I didn't too T T. When I received a present from my best friend,I felt both happy and sorry... Sorry is that I had no gifts to give her.I really want to give a present to her next time or I may feel sad because on my conscience~On conclusion,I felt happy more than sentimental because of her.

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Graduation Day (I)

The eighteente of June is the Graduation Day.Many students cried on that day because they were going to leave their friends for a long time or even forever.Of course I didn't want to leave them too,but just l little.

Some of the students signed their names on the school uniforms each other for marking the occasion before they leaved.But school director stood against with them.He said that where you signed,he would use a pair of sissors to cut it where you mark.He threatened us that we had no dare to sign.But strangely,there were still a few students didn't obey what he said.In my opinion,it is all right to sign because of the final day that they probably had no chance to meet each other longer,isn't it?

On gradution day,before we went into the hall,schoolmaster let us walked around the school to enjoy the view like trees,playground for the last time.While we walked pass the trees and trees,suddenly there was a sad music playing somewhere.I don't know who played it,but one thing I sure was that the music was so 'magical' that it made some of the students cried while they walked.(hhaaa!!) I thaught it isn't nessery to play the music!
When we got into the hall,we were busy giving gifts to our friends or signing on the special manuals instead of uniforms.But some students didn't prepare gifts!Of course I didn't too T T. When I received a present from my best friend,I felt both happy and sorry... Sorry is that I had no gifts to give her.I really want to give a present to her next time or I may feel sad because on my conscience~On conclusion,I felt happy more than sentimental because of her.

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Graduation Day (I)

The eighteenth of June was the Graduation Day. Many students cried on that day because they were going to leave their friends for a long time or even forever. Of course I didn't want to leave them either, but just l little. (?  I just cried a little bit.)

Some of the students signed their names on the each other's school uniforms  to mark the occasion before they left.  But the school director was against with them. He said that where you signed, he would use a pair of sissors to cut it out where you mark.  He threatened us so that we did not dare to sign. But strangely,there were still a few students who didn't obey what he said.  In my opinion, it was all right to sign because it was the final day and they probably would have no chance to meet each other again,isn't it? don't you think?

On gradution day, before we went into the hall, the schoolmaster let us walked around the school to enjoy the view such as the trees, the playground for the last time.  While we walked past the trees and trees, suddenly there was a sad music playing somewhere. I don't know who was playing it, but one thing I sure was sure, that the music was so 'magical' that it made some of the students cry while they walked.(hhaaa!!) I thought it isn't necessary to play the music!  What is nessery to catched the sad context to cried them out XD?~ (I don't undersatnd this sentence.  What is XD?)

When we got into the hall, we were busy giving gifts to our friends or signing on the special manuals instead of uniforms.  But some students didn't prepare gifts!  Of course I was one of them.  When I received a present from my best friend, I felt both happy and sorry, sorry is that I had no gifts to give her.  I really want to give a present to her next time or I may feel sad because it's on my conscience.  In conclusion, I felt happy more than sentimental because of her.

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謝謝^^

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