Business

I am 21 years old. What comes to in my mind every day all days is to starting a new business. I have a lot of ideas but I do not have money for them/to fulfill them. I am tired of still borrowing/receiving having my money from my parents at the same time as when some of my friends are economically independent. Of course I need help but I also have very good experience which is very good and could help me to start a business. A new business will change my life a lot; I will be independent, and I will be able to marry earlier, and have my buy/purchase a new car earlier, and also my buy/purchase a new house. I believe that anyone who is not economically independent he wont be free as he they will always needs someone to help  him them. I advise all youth to try to start a new business and to rethink about their future. Thanks.

I made a lot of corrections because your English is fairly advanced - I feel I can get very specific with grammatical corrections. :) It was very well written. There are just problems with "," and some verb tenses. That is about it. I also made some suggestions to help your writing sound more "fluent" - but it does not mean what you said was wrong.

Keep it up! And good luck with your business aspirations.