How Do Young People Dress?

Many people say teenagers do not like to dress like their parents. In this essay, I will analyse the arguments for, and against, this assertion.

There are two main arguments for this affirmation. Firstly, young people develop their own personality, and they need to express this through several styles of clothing. Secondly, it is a period in life when the relationships between parents and their children are difficult, so young people use clothes as a form of rebellion.

On the other hand, it does seem that young people dress very differently from their parents, but it may not be completely true. Although teenagers' clothes are different from their parents because of the age difference, there seems to be a connection between a parent's dress sense and their children's.

Having weighed the two sides, I am in favour of the argument that says young people do not like dressing in a similar style to their parents, because they need to send a message to society explaining that they are different. Although they do this, their dress sense can be influenced by their parent's.

Hey mate! I know I made a lot of changes to your essay. I hope I successfuly captured your meaning. Also, in your introduction you said, "...do not like to..." However, in the body of your essay you did not mention the word, "like", or, "dislike." You just need to make a minor adjustment to your intro.

Phil.

How do young people dress?

Many people say teenagers do not like to dress like their parents. In this essay I analyse the arguments for and against this assertion.

There are two main arguments for this affirmation. Firstly, young people are developing their personality and they need to prove (not quite the right word here, maybe "try"?) several styles of clothing. Secondly, it is a period in a life when the relationships between parents and sons (maybe "children" instead of just boy children!) are more difficult, so young people use clothes as a form of rebellion. 

On the other hand, it seems that young people dress very different from their parents, but it could not be true, because their clothes are different because there are a big gap in their ages, but there is a connection between parent's dressing style and son's (children's) dressing style.

On balance, I am in favour that young people do not like dressing in a similar style as their parents, because they need to send a message to the society explaining that they are different, although their clothes could be related with their parent's clothes.

Aureli, this is very good!  I could do more grammatical and "flow" corrections if you wanted.