My hometown.
I want to talk about my hometown. It is the village in Ben Luc District, Long An Province. I will describe a little about my village so that you can imagine. My hometown is the land of peace and fresh with a river and many green fields. Far away, there are some houses under the row of bamboo. My house is one of them. It’s on the riverside. When I was a child, every afternoon, I and my friends often go swimming.
In the past, when walking on the field, you can see some buffaloes grazing, but at present you can not. Because people don’t use buffalo for plowing. Instead that, people use tractors.
People in my village is very gentle and friendly. When they meet together, they always greet with a smile. And they often help together when in trouble. This is the feature of the village. This is not the same as in urban. Because in urban, sometimes their house side by side but they never see together.
When I was a child, I and my friends had many funny games such as fly a kite, catch crickets or sometimes we only walk together around the fields.
I have a strong attachment to my village during my childhood. And now, I always feel happy and peaceful when I come back my home.
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My hometown.
I want to talk about my hometown. It is the village in Ben Luc District, Long An Province. I will describe a little about my village so that you can imagine. My hometown is the land of peace and fresh with a river and many green fields. Far away, there are some houses under the row of bamboo. My house is one of them. It’s on the riverside. When I was a child, every afternoon, my friends and I would often go swimming.
In the past, when walking in the field, you cold see buffaloes grazing, but now you can not because people don’t use buffalo for plowing. Instead, people use tractors.
People in my village are very gentle and friendly. When they get together, they always greet with a smile. They often help each other when in trouble. This is the feature of the village. This is not the same as in cities. Because in cities, houses are side by side but people never see their neighbors.
When I was a child, my friends and I played many games. We would fly a kite, catch crickets or sometimes we would walk around the fields.
I had a strong attachment to my village during my childhood. And now, I always feel happy and peaceful when I come back home.
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I want to talk about my hometown. It is the village in Ben Luc District, Long An Province. I will tell you a little about my village so that you can imagine it. My hometown is the land of peace and fresh with a river and many green fields. Far away, there are some houses under the row of bamboo. My house is one of them. It’s on the riverside. When I was a child, every afternoon, my friends and I would often go swimming.
In the past, when walking in the field, you cold see buffaloes grazing, but now you can not because people don’t use buffalo for plowing anymore. Now, people use tractors.
People in my village are very gentle and friendly. When they get together, they always greet each other with a smile. And they will help when someone's in trouble. This is the feature of the village. This is not the same as in cities, because in cities people can live side by side without ever knowing their neighbors.
When I was a child, my friends and I had played many games. We would fly a kite, catch crickets or sometimes walk together around the fields.
I had a strong attachment to my village during my childhood. And now, I always feel happy and peaceful when I come back home.
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I made corrections, but I also wanted to point out this part of your writing: " This is the feature of the village. This is not the same as in urban. Because in urban, sometimes their house side by side but they never see together. " I know exactly what you're trying to say, but it could be phrased better. Perhaps " this is the good thing about a village, unlike a city where people don't know their neighbors." Or something to that effect. I didn't want to totally change your sentences when making corrections.
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