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An unexpected small cat today is my turn to take photos for our library,which is being built now. after that ,i walk around our lake in our college .suddenly i found a small lovely cat beside the lake.it is so cute that i could not help picking up my camera to take photo for it .but i can not use the SLR camera skilfully .so i just take some common photos for it .i do not know how to catch the act and lovely of it .(I want to share my photos with ,but i do not know how to upload it )

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An Unexpected Small Cat

Today it was my turn to take photos for our library, which is being built now. Afterwards, i walked around the lake at my college. I spotted a lovely little cat beside the lake. It was so cute that i couldn't help picking up my camera to take a photo of it.

Unfortunately, I don't know how to use the SLR camera very well, so i just took some normal photos of it. I couldn't fully capture the act and its loveliness. (I wanted to share my photos, but i don't know how to upload them).


I really enjoyed reading this because I love cats :)

(1) Put your punctuation immediately following the word it goes by.

(2) I changed "found" to "spotted" because it sounds better.

(3) Shorten "do not" and "could not" to "don't" and "couldn't". It sounds much more natural.

(4) Take picture "of" things. If you say "I took a picture for the cat." it means that you took a picture because the cat wanted you too, which is really funny.
 
(5) Instead of following words with "of it", put "its" in front of them. It sounds better.

(6) Lovely's noun form is "loveliness". 

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