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Love between the difference There is some foreigner who work in my company,usually they came from china. Today, I talked with his girlfriend,she is Indonesian girl. She come in my room when lunch time,we talked about manything.. She a nice girl,but there is something that make me not comfort when talk with her,she is Indonesian but her bahasa is not good,she talking like foreigner her grammar so messy it's make me confused with what her mean.. A few weeks ago,her boyfriend was got a car accident. It's so bad,his ribs broken and the car was wrecked. I ask her,how that can be happen." I just was quarel with him that day,he called me 15 times that night but I'm not picking up his call til someone call me and say that he is got an accident, I don't believe it I think it's just a joke to make me fear but I'm wrong because that's true.." she said.. I can see that she loved him so much, it's looks in her eyes.. tears fall down when she tell the story that night,she so regret why not picking up his call. I know that it's not easy to make a relationship between the difference. Culture,language,religion not only make our life colourfull but sometimes that brings some trouble in our life.. Her parents not support her relationship maybe her parents just scare if someday that man will leave her daughter to back in his Country..

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Love between the difference

There is are some foreigner who work in my company,; usually they came from china. Today, I talked with his girlfriend. She is an Indonesian girl. She come in my room when lunch time came into my room at lunch time,we talked about many things.. She a nice girl,but there is something that makes me not comfortable when talking with her. She is Indonesian but her bahasa is not good. She talks like a foreigner. Her grammar is so messy it's makes me confused with about what her she means..

A few weeks ago,her boyfriend was got in a car accident. It's so bad,his ribs were broken and the car was wrecked. I ask her, "How that can be can that happen?" I just was quarrelling with him that day,he called me 15 times that night but I'm not picking I didn't pick up his call until someone called me and say said that he is got into an accident. I don't didn't believe it. I think thought it's just a joke to make me fear afraid, but I'm wrong because that's it was true.." she said..

I can see that she loved him so much, it's the looks in her eyes.. tears fall fell down when she tell  told the story that night. She so regret why not picking up his call regrets not picking up his call. I know that it's not easy to make a relationship between with all the differences. Culture,language, and religion not only make our life colourfull but sometimes that brings some trouble in to our life.. Her parents not don't support her relationship. Maybe her parents just scared if that some day (not "someday") that man will leave her their daughter to go back in to his Country..

 

Good work. I could understand every sentence! Two things that you might like to practice:

1. Full stops. You use a lot of commas "," which makes your sentences very long. It would be better to use a full stop "." (called a "period" in America) and start a new sentence.

 

2. Past tense. You can learn about the way words change when you talk about the past. For example:

TODAY or NOW (present continuous tense):

I am watching the movie.

He is calling me.

She is sick.

 

YESTERDAY or THE PAST (simple past tense):

I watched the movie.

He called me.

She was sick.

 

But your writing was perfectly understandable, so good job!

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