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Arugment Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both this views and give your own opinion. In recent years, Chinese parents are enthusiastic about everything that could bring an all-round development of their child. They take them to varies after-class curriculums just to make sure their kids are competitive. This phenomenon has trigger arguments among the society as some people suggest that children should be encouraged to compete whereas others contend that they should be taught to co-operate to become useful adult. I think that a coin has two side, both claims have their pros and cons. Competition brings ambition and determination out of a person, and usually along the two come one’s hidden potential. In competitions, one learned not only to beat his or her rival but also, most importantly, him/herself. However, a sense of competition of a child should not be overemphasized. A child with strong sense of competition sees their peers as his or her enemy. The desire the win jeopardizes a child’s mental development and would cause them trouble in their relationships with others. Co-operation, on the other hand, is also an important character. People who own this character smooth things around them. It humbles a person to overlook his or her thoughts and feelings but to consider a greater view of a subject. Child who taught to be co-operative rather than to be competitive lives in harmony with others and has better personal relationships. However, in some circumstances, one is required to speak up rather than being co-operatively remain silence while in other times one needs to humble his or her own ambition and works with others. All in all, children should be encouraged to have characters that enable them to enjoy their lives and experience the world, and having a balance sense of competition and co-operation is the best way to gain this. ******************************** I hope this wasn't too long for a notebook.

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In recent years, Chinese parents are enthusiastic about everything that could bring an facilitate all-round development of their child. They take them to varies various after-class curriculums programs just to make sure their kids are competitive. This phenomenon has triggered arguments among the within (Chinese) society, as some people suggest that children should be encouraged to compete, whereas others contend that they should be taught to co-operate to become useful productive adults. I think that as a coin has two side, both claims have their pros and cons.

Competition brings ambition and determination out of a person, and usually along with the two come one’s hidden potential. In competitions, one learneds not only to beat his or her rival, but also, most more importantly, him/herself. (I'd rewrite this sentence: "but also, more importantly, to improve on his/her own personal best.") However, a sense of competition of a child should not be overemphasized. A child with a strong sense of competition sees their peers as his or her enemy. The desire the to win jeopardizes a child’s mental development and would  could cause them trouble in their relationships with others.

Co-operation, on the other hand, is also an important characteristic. People who own posess this characteristic smooth things around them. It humbles a person to overlook his or her thoughts and feelings but to and consider a greater view of a subject. Child A child who is taught to be co-operative rather than to be competitive lives in harmony with others and has better personal relationships. However, in some circumstances, one is required to speak up rather than being co-operatively remaining silence silent; while in other times one needs to humble his or her own ambition and works together with others.

All in all, children should be encouraged to have characters that enable them to enjoy their lives and experience the world, and having a balance sense of competition and co-operation is the best way to gain achieve this.

Let me know if you have questions, again! :) And yes, I did think it was a good argument and used a "wide range of structures and lexical," as far as I understand what that means!! lol

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