It was sunny.

I went to the Internet Cafe that I hocked on spending a time for these days, acutually.

(Recently I've been hooked on spending time at the internet cafe.)

I devote my time to reading a comics when I'm there.

(I devote my time there to reading comics.)

Sometimes I've thout it's a waste of time this choices,though.

(Sometimes I think it's a waste of time though.)

Nice! The trick to speaking and writing well in English is to be concise (use less words). That way your language is efficient and effective. Good luck!

3line Dialy

*It would be appreciated If you corrected these sentence.

【15 January】

It was sunny.

I went to the Internet Cafe that I hocked on spending a time for these days, acutually. 

This sentence is grammatically incorrect. Better to say:    Actually, I visited the internet cafe, where I'm obsessed on spending time these days.

I devote my time to reading (a) comics when I'm there. 

Sometimes,  I've thought (thout) it's a waste of time (this choices), though.

3line Dialy

*It would be appreciated If you corrected these sentence.

【15 January】

It was sunny.（晴天）
I went to the Internet Cafe that I am hooked on these days. (or, am addicted to)
（インターネットカフェに行った。最近ハマってます）
I devote my time to reading a comics while I'm there.
（専ら漫画読んでます）
Sometimes I've thought it's a waste of time this choices,though.
（たまに、この選択肢はもったいない気もしますが）

Great!