My first attempt was successful!

I just wrote my first note a while ago, in an attempt to know whether someone would help me.

Success! There were two people who corrected my entry.
I never thought there was anything wrong with what I wrote, but now I know, thanks to them.


Now I'm going to write as many entries as I can and see if I write anything wrong.

(This is my second entry. Please correct any mistakes.)

^_^

My First Attempt Was Successful!

I just wrote my first (1st) note a while ago to see if anyone (in an attempt to know
whether someone) would help me.

Success! There were two people who corrected my entry.
I never thought there was anything (there's something) wrong with what I had written (wrote), but now I know. Thanks to them.


From now on (Now),  I'm going to write as many entries as
I can and look out for any corrections. (see if I wrote something wrong.)

(This is my second entry. Please correct any mistakes.)

^_^

You used the word 'now' in successive sentences. To make it read a little better, you could say 'from now on'

My first attempt was successful!

I just wrote my 1st note a while ago in an attempt to know
whether someone would help me.

Success! There were two people who corrected my entry.
I never thought there was  something wrong with what I wrote, but 
now I know. Thanks to them.


Now I'm going to write as many entries as
I can and see if I wrote something wrong.

(This is my second entry. Please correct any mistake.) 

^_^