Dear Editor: 

I am writing to express my disapproval of the new system of the government proposed government identification system. I read the headline in this After reading about it in your newspaper, and I felt very angry and I need I would to express my opinion in this deal matter.
I think The new proposed system will not better than the old provide an improvement over the existing one. Showing our IDs The government identification credential is an easy way effective and efficient means of to prove validating our identity, and I don’t believe forge IDs counterfiting government identification credentials is not as an easy of a task as they said was stated.
Another thing I don’t like of this new system is we need to carry I also take issue with the proposal to accept a bill or a statement bank banking statement as proof of identity. How many People have always those things do not normally carry bills or bank statements with them. We are always carrying our IDs but not bills!
I hope that our government will think about these questions and change it mind reconsider this proposal. I want to thanks the newspaper the Thank you for opportunity of publish considering my opinion.
Yours faithfully Best regards,
Teresa 

Hi Teresa. I re-wrote your letter in U.S. business form, plus added some business "lingo". Cheers! Good Job. --Dan

Opinion article

1. You have read the headline below and feel strongly about it.
Write a letter to the newspaper expressing your views.
CONGESTION CHARGES WILL EASE TRAFFIC CHAOS
The government is planning to put an end to IDs as a way of
identification because the system is expensive to run, difficult to
organise and easy to forge. From next year onwards, it will be
enough for Spanish citizens to show bills and banks statements
as a proof of identity. Write a post for the
andnowtheywanttogetridofIDs forum expressing your views on
this matter.


Dear Editor,

I’m writing to express my disapproval of the new system by the government. I read the headline in this newspaper and I felt very angry. I need to express my opinion in this deal on this matter.

I think the new system will not be better than the old one. Showing our IDs is an easy way of proving our identity and I don’t believe forging IDs is an easy task as claimed they said .

Another thing I don’t like about this new system is that we need to carry a bill or a statement bank. How many people always have those things? We are always carrying our IDs but not our bills!

I hope the government will think about these questions and change its mind. I want to thanks the newspaper for the opportunity of having my opinion published.

Yours sincerely,

Teresa

This was quite good! You just need to pay attention to verb forms and prepositions. There was a good use of formal expression as well.

Feel free to ask about any corrections I have made.