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another motivation to study abroad More recently, another reason that spurred me to continue my study and research was that our family firm, a leading food processing company that connects local farmers to national markets, chose delisting in the U.S. this year as a way of better development to consolidate advantages and market position and continuously improve enterprise core competitiveness in the vigorous competition environment. It further triggered my interest in the field of finance and motivated me to explore more. However, I am clearly aware that I still need a more systematic and advanced education in Finance to go further, otherwise I will easily get lost at higher level of complexity. I also hope that one day, after my study, I could analyse the short and long term economic growth prospects and risks, hoping to help propose some countermeasures in the financing capacity and ensure long term competitiveness of the business on my own.

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Another motivation to study abroad
More recently, another reason has spurred me to continue my studies and research. Our family firm; a leading food processing company that connects local farmers to national markets, chose delisting in the U.S. this year. Delisting was chosen as a way of better development to consolidate advantages and market position and continuously improve enterprise core competitiveness in the vigorous competition environment. It further triggered my interest in the field of finance and motivated me to explore more. However, I am clearly aware that I still need a more systematic and advanced education in finance to go further; otherwise, I will easily get lost in the higher levels of complexity. I also hope that one day, after my studies are completed, I could analyze the short and long term economic growth prospects and risks, hoping to help propose countermeasures to ensure the long term competitiveness of the business.

I split the first sentence because it is a "run on" sentence. Too many words and ideas in one sentence.
Since there is no punctuation; the third part of the first sentence can be interpreted in multiple ways. For example:

Delisting was chosen as a way of improving development, consolidating advantages and market positions, and continuously improving enterprise core competitiveness in a vigorously competitive environment.

Delisting was chosen as a way to better develop consolidated advantages and market position; and, continuously improving enterprise core competitiveness in a vigorously competitive environment.

"I am clearly aware" could also be "I am keenly aware", or, "I am very aware"

"prospects" should probably be "potentials". In sales the word "prospects" typically refers to potential customers.

I removed "in the financing capacity and" because most of the previous paragraph already talks about your study of finance; and, placing this text in the last sentence is unnecessary and complicates the sentence.

I removed " on my own" because it is unnecessary and weakens the end of the paragraph.

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