My passion :)

Hey, I just want to tell you about me , because I think it's important for you to know about how I can be your new friend and I really want to meet lots of people here to practice my english and other languagues.  I love rock music and I have (can't use a contraction here) a little crush on Led Zeppelin, Kurt Cobain, and Jon Bon Jovi:  oh God!  They were so hot, obviously in their prime (jajajajaja):  now they're old, but their music is so cool and has inspired me so much.  I love to read all kinds of books, and my biggest dream is to travel around the world.  Now you know more about me :3

Be careful with the pronoun "I" (yo).  It must be capitalized every time.  Also, whenever you use an infinitive, add the word "to" to the beginning:  most times, the infinitive form will include the word "to." Other than that, just little corrections.  Keep practicing!  :)

My passion:)

Hey, I just want to tell you about me , because I think it's important to know about eachother (? what did you want to say?) and I really want to meet lots of people here to practice my English and French (listing any other languages you speak like this will make you sound more natural). I love rock music and I have a penchant for American music, like Led Zeppelin, Kurt Cobain, and Jon Bon Jovi. Oh God! (? Don't say that it's weird) They were really hot back in the day (this is a little bit of slang).  Now they're old, but their music is so cool and it's inspired me so much. I love to read all kinds of books, and my biggest dream is to travel around the world. Now you know more about me :3

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I like Led Zeppelin. Do you know Def Leppard? I think they were around the same time period, and they were really popular as well way back in the day.