my writing assignment 2
☆Mobile phones distract students' attention☆
At present, Evolution of technology have rapid progress,so it affect to comfort in communication. Competitions of technology in each company make better about applications; therefore, people are interested in mobile phones than social life. Smart phones are part of daily life of students because everything that they want to know can search from it. For example,when they don't know about words,they can search meaning of them. Others advantage of application in smart phones are chatting with friends, searching in the internet,and playing games. Even though, advantages of smart phones were used in many way, some students uses in inappropriate way. This cause bring about bad result to their learning. For instance, some students uses smart phones over time in class, so they don't have concentration in lesson which teacher is teaching. Afterwards, their grades wouldn't look so good. Will smart phones distract students' attention? It depend on how to use the smart phones of them.
•○• I sent this work for my teacher and I got 5 / 10 point. Where grammar or meaning that I use incorrect? Tell me please /\ •○•
●○● This is a extra score of work in my writing subject. I have a time that I have to write about this topic around 2 hours. I'm try the best :( ●○●
☆ I don't like this subject because I aren't good in writing skill and how to use words in paragraph. "BUT" I'M MAJORING ENGLISH 555
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my writing assignment 2
☆Mobile phones distract students' attention☆
At present, Evolution of technology have is making rapid progress, so it affect to comfort in communication. Competitions of technology in each company make better about applications; therefore, people are interested in mobile phones than social life.
(very difficult to work out your meaning so far - the words are individually correct, but no meaning emerges Techonlogy is improving, It is convenient. Competition creates better applications. Phones become part of our social life???)
Smart phones are part of daily life of students because everything that they want to know they can search for on the internet using them from it. For example, when they don't know about words, they can search for their meaning of them. Others advantages of applications in smart phone applications are allow chatting with friends, searching in the internet, and playing games. Even although, advantages of smart phones were can be used in many good ways, some students uses them in inappropriate ways. This cause brings about bad results for to their learning. For instance, some students uses smart phones over time in class, so they don't have concentration in lesson which when the teacher is teaching. Afterwards, As a result their grades wouldn't look aren't so good.
Will smart phones distract students' attention? It depends on how to they use their smart phones of them.
•○• I sent this work for my teacher and I got 5 / 10 point. Where grammar or meaning that I use incorrect? Tell me please /\ •○•
●○● This is a extra score of work in my writing subject. I have a time that I have to write about this topic around 2 hours. I'm try the best :( ●○●
☆ I don't like this subject because I aren't good in writing skill and how to use words in paragraph. "BUT" I'M MAJORING ENGLISH 555
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Actually !!! I mistake about Subject-verb Agreement.
☆ Thank you Khaled_elsha3r ☆
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well , that was very interesting article
but there are a few mistakes in grammar such as
1) you said ( so it affect to comfort in communication ) while you suppose to put S letter in affect __________ it affects
2 ) same mistake when u said ( It depend ) should be depends
3 ) some students uses smart phones should be ( use ) without s as students are plural
YOU said ( It depend on how to use the smart phones of them. )
I donna think you have to say of them ... if you deleted it would be better
I think the re are some others mistakes wish some body else could help more
wish you good luck
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Thank you Chandan kumar.
But this work have a lot of wrong grammar and meaning. In paper that my teacher sent it back for me have red marks almost all line of writing. I just got 5/10 score .. so sad :(
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Nice written.....well cool and good...
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