Just break through the barriers

Life can't does not always go as we planned, and we may encounter various kinds of difficulties- especially the ones created from other people. When we want to do something, there are must be lots of people that disapprove of us and wait for to seeing our failures. But However, we just can can just try our best to break through those mountain-like barriers; ignoring every mocking face around surrounding us and finally getting our sweet results. We are the only ones that can help ourselves, and convince that we can do more than we imagine. I hope this can give inspirations for the people who are in the same situation as me. There is no time to look back, so just break the barriers and keep moving on.

This was well written with a strong and clear message. 

A few pointers:

1.

Watch out for when you use 'absolute' words in your sentences where you should not apply them. E.g.

"Life can't go as we planned" is incorrect, due to the fact that you cannot possibly predict the future for every single individual in the word.

Thus, it is more appropriate to change it into "Life does not always go as we planned". 

Also, if you'd like to be more figurative in your writing- you can mix it up and write:

"Life does not always flow as we planned" which personifies it or maybe even, "Life, whether planned out or spontaneously lived out, is hardly ever a smooth road." 

It's totally up to you to decide how to write out your sentences though, but hopefully that gives you an insight as to how you can enhance your writing so it is moe figurative and exciting to read. 

2. 

"But we just can try our best to break through those mountain-like barriers, ignore every mocking face around us, and finally get our sweet result."

It's best not to start off sentences with "But". 

This would also be the case with "Because" and "and".

Grammatically, using 'But' in the start of the sentence is not incorrect (I think), but it is not looked upon well to do so. Try replacing 'but' with 'However', 'On the other hand' and etc. 

3. 

"But we just can try our best to break through those mountain-like barriers, ignore every mocking face around us, and finally get our sweet result."

Changed into:

"However, we can just try our best to break through those mountain-like barriers; ignoring every mocking face surrounding us and finally getting our sweet results."

If you'd like to know why I changed it from a comma to a semi-colon, check out these hilariously easy-to-understand web comic by the oatmeal:

http://theoatmeal.com/comics/semicolon

4. 

Watch out for where plurals are appropriate or required- as well as where they aren't in a sentence.