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This is not a good day! I am a regular office worker.I get up at 7:20am everyday,then wash face and brush teeth in 10 minutes , pick clothes and put them on in 20 minutes, go to the bus station and wait the bus in 5 minutes ,take 10 minutes by bus,go to the company in 12 minutes ,have breakfast in 10 minutes ,so I can go to the company before half past eight. Today, I wake up at 7:20am as usual,and wash my hair in the balcony,the balcony is open to the sky.There are many birds ,they make their home under the eaves.They are so cute and they have beautifull singing.I don't want to be late for my work,so I wash my hair as soon as I can,I finish with 10 minutes to wash and dry my hair.What a good day! When I am ready to down from the balcony with bag,I suddenly feel something in my head,I touched it and smelled.Oh, no!It is bird poop!Hey,birds,I hate you, you don't cute at all! I had wash my hair again,and take a taxi to my work on an empty stomach,but I am still late. I am very hungry now!What a bad day!

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This is not a good day!

I am a regular office worker. I get up at 7:20am everyday, then I wash my face and brush my teeth in 10 minutes. I pick my clothes and put them on in 20 minutes. Then I go to the bus station and wait for the bus in 5 minutes, I take spend 10 minutes by on the bus. I go to the my company in 12 minutes, and have breakfast in 10 minutes, so that I can go to the company start work before half past eight.
Today, I wake woke up at 7:20am as usual, and washed my hair in on the balcony. The balcony is open to the sky. There are many birds and they make their home under the eaves.They are so cute and they have beautiful singing. I don't didn't want to be late for my work, so I washed my hair as soon quick as I can could. I finish with It took me 10 minutes to wash and dry my hair. What a good day! When I am was ready to down from the balcony with my bag, I suddenly feel felt something in on my head, I touched it and smelled it. Oh, no! It is was bird poop! Hey,birds, I hate you, you don't aren't cute at all!
I had wash my hair again, and take a taxi to my work on an empty stomach, but I am was still late.
I am very hungry now! What a bad day!

 

Better you break your sentences down a bit more and make them shorter. It makes it easier to understand your message if you do this. A good rule of thumb is when you read the sentence out loud, if you need to take a breath, then this is a good place to begin a new sentence. 

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sounds like a shitty day ;P
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Thank you ,everybody!You are so nice!
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There is a saying in english that you have good luck when a bird does his business on your head.I not too sure i agree with this though
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You should cook the birds for breakfast next time. hahaha

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