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我不喜欢血
我非常怕血,但是我想成为医生。
5岁的时候我跌落(跌倒了,1),把我头割(磕破了,2)。我出血了得很多(我出了很多血,3)。15岁的时候我看了(看到了,4)我的弟弟打针,我晕(晕倒了,5)。从15岁的时候我每年晕(从15岁开始,我每年都会晕血,6)。所以,我怕看血(看到血,7)。
最近我看看(看,8)关于医学的电视节目,那个节目叫House。现在,我学工程。因为我喜欢拼图。但是,工程比身体(人体学,9)简单。
我希望不怕血(我不怕血10)。我想医生是我完美的工作。
1.跌落:Maybe"跌倒了"is more better.
Simply put,"跌落" emphasize on action,such as"fall",and"跌倒了"empasize on result,such as"fall down"
2.割:磕破了
For one thing,it's a verb,what you wanna to express is a result,you need the adj. after the verb.For another,"割" usually means cut off by something like knife,so it's inapproprite here.
3.出血了得很多:出了很多血
the word order should be "predicate(出了)+object(很多血)"
4.看了:看到了
the same mistake as the second one(empasis on action or result)
5.晕:晕倒了
ditto,empasis on action or result
6.从15岁的时候我每年晕:从15岁开始,我每年都会晕血(Since I was 15,I faint at sight of blood every year)
“15岁的时候”means at the age of ten,just a year.but"每年"means every year
7.看:看到
empasis on action or result
8.看看:看
Wu~~~how to explain it,I found Chinese is difficult already.
9.身体:人体学?
I guess you wanna say somatology?
10.我希望不怕血:我希望我不怕血
lack of subject in clause
Bye the way ,In China,we often say "晕血" instead of "怕血",which means "faint at sight of blood "
And which TV serious you mentioned is Doctor House?I love it as well.
我不喜欢血
我非常怕血,但是我想成为医生。
5岁的时候我跌落(摔倒了),把我头割(磕破了)。我出(了很多的)血了得很多。15岁的时候我看了我的弟弟打针,我晕(到了)。从15岁的时候(开始)我每年(看到血就)晕。所以,我怕看(到)血。
最近我看看关于医学的电视节目,那个节目叫House。现在,我学工程。因为我喜欢拼图。但是,工程比身体(医学)简单。
我希望,(我)不怕血。我想医生是我完美的工作。
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