Correct this entry?  OK!  Watch your puncuation; two spaces after a sentence, be sure you proofread a couple of times before you click on "submit".  There are four places we never go to:  a) there  b) here  c) home  d) downtown.  No "to" with "there".  You are mixing active and passive voices; the place was exciting, you were excited.  Using "can" to describe the first time seeing snow is OK but you had never seen it before so it would be nice to let us know that by saying it was the first time you have ever seen snow.  The verbs match and fit situations!  What is the situation?  Find and use the verb that goes with the situration.  The action verbs have helping verbs, "can" is helping "see" and you are telling us that you are able to see snow or that it is possible to see, it's OK to use in your entry but if you had never seen snow before would it not be better to tell us that?  

It's a great entry, it is dynamic and tells a strong story; you have expressed yourself well, you are doing a good job of improving your English.  I enjoyed reading your entry.  Continue your good progress!