an essay for IELTS writing
Nowadays, Children's education has been increasingly drawing attentions from various levels of our society. One of hot topics is that whether children brought up in needy familities are better prepared for handing the problem ecountered in their adult years than those who are rasied in wealthy famalies.
Acadamically, children raised up in poor families have stronger operation skills. Because of the limited incomes of their parent, they are more likely to design and make toys by themselves rather than spend a great deal of money on a new one. In terms of psychology aspect, children living in needy households are supposed to be more independent......
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an essay for IELTS writing
Nowadays, Children's education has increasingly drawn attention from various levels of our society. One of the hot topics is that whether children brought up in needy familities are better prepared for handling the problems ecountered in their adult years than those who were rasied in wealthy families.
Acadamically, children raised up in poor families have stronger operation skills. Because of the limited incomes of their parents, they are more likely to design and make toys by themselves, rather than spend a great deal of money on a new one. In terms of psychological aspects, children living in needy households should be more independent......
Nice job. I think you did a nice job with the two paragraphs. I made a couple small changes, especially where you used more complicated verb tenses. Make note of the errors I corrected, and keep up the good work! :)
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