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It is time we all relied less on private motor vehicles to get around and instead used other forms of transport. Do you agree or disagree? Why?
Nowadays a significant proportion of people in our country has private motor vehicle. May be for most people, a car is the third-largest purchase they will ever make, next to a house and an education but for others it became a necessity rather than a luxury. For example our neighbor has an old grandfather who was paralysed but now he can move but very slowly and only for a short distance. And man next to door often takes him to clinics because such people can not go by public transport. For such reasons or another car is a necessity. What’s more we can save our time. As an illustration to get to work place in the morning at the bus station you have to wait for a long time and can be late. On the contrary if you have vehicle it is faster to be where you want. Besides speaking about travelling we can spend less by own transport rather than by others. My friend went by own car to Europe last summer and spent less than my other friends. However there are a lot of problems with it too. First of all we have to pay a lot for fuel meanwhile we can pay less by bus. And everybody knows that petrol costs a big money per litre. Furthermore need to pay for car parking in order to protect by guards or it can be auto theft if you put your car somewhere. In addition it can break anytime. Also there are a lot of car accidents than public transport. Most of these were caused by drivers who increased speed limit or drunk driving. One more argument is a rush our. We lose time while public transports like bus can move.
In conclusion I want to say that both of car or public transport has own advantages and disadvantages. But I think it is better to have private motor vehicle even it has some issues.
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Could you check my essay and correct
It is time we all relied less on private motor vehicles to get around and used other forms of transportation instead. Do you agree or disagree? Why?
Nowadays, a significant proportion of people in our country have private motor vehicles. Maybe for most people, a car is the third-largest purchase they will ever make, desides a house and an education, but for others it became a necessity rather than a luxury. For example our neighbor has an old grandfather who was paralysed but now he can move but very slowly and only for a short distance. And man next to door He often takes him to clinics because such people can not use public transportation. For such reasons or anothers, a car is a necessity. What’s more, we can save our time. For example, to get to your workplace in the morning, you have to wait for a long time at the bus station, and can be late. On the contrary, if you have a vehicle, there is no waiting in line. Besides, speaking about travelling, we may spend less by using our own cars rather than public transportation. My friend (use a name here) drove in his car to Europe last summer and spent less money than my other friends.
However, there are a lot of problems with it too. First of all, we have to pay a lot for fuel whereas we pay less for the bus. And Everybody knows that petrol costs a big money per litre. Furthermore, we need to pay for car parking in order to protect by guards or it can be auto our cars from theft. In addition, it can break down anytime. Also, there are a lot more car accidents than public transport. Most of them are caused by drivers who drive over the speed limit or are drunk. One more argument is the rush hour. We lose time and get stuck in traffic, while public transportion generally moves much faster.
In conclusion, (I want to say that) both, car and public transportation, have their advantages and disadvantages. But I think it is better to have a private motor vehicle even there are some issues.
Good job, Aina. You need to insert commas where necessary.
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