My favorite place in Australia

This is my homework. My teach gave me 1 page essay on favorite place in Australia.
Please help me!!

When I lived in Australia, Toowoomba was my favorite place. Toowoomba is for 2 hours away by bus from Brisbane. When I arrived in Australia I stayed in Brisbane first and 10 days later I moved to Toowoomba. One of my Korean friends who lives there he recommended that I should get a job.
First I can say Unfortunately I wasn't able to get a job in Toowoomba even though I lived there for 3 months, but why was my favorite place in Toowoomba? The reason is I met great friends in Toowoomba.
When I arrived in there, friends had a party for me. I hadn't experienced parties so I was excited, and they always helped me, go to the market, go to companies to submit my resume because I didn't have any car or a drivers license. Toowoomba is in the country even if there is publice traffice but it's expensive and the bus runs every hour.
My second reason is that there is the USQ (University of Southern Queensland). USQ has a Korean and Australian society. We call KATS (Korea Australia Toowoomba Society). Every Tuesday I went to the club and met a lot of Australians. Sometimes one of my friends invited the group members to their house for had dinner. I was able to experience real Australian life while I lived in Toowoomba.
But I had to move from there cause I almost lost my money almost and I wanted to get a job, so I moved to another city.
Before I went back to Korea I visited in Toowoomba to meet my friends. They had a welcome back party for me. How can I forget them and that place?
That's why Toowoomba is my favorite place in Australia.

That sounds like it was a lot of fun! I wish I had an experience like that to share with everyone. :)

My favorite place in Australia

This is my homework. My teach gave me 1 page essay on favorite place in Australia.
Please help me!!

When I lived in Australia, Toowoomba is my favorite place. It will take 2 hours to reach Toowoomba by bus from Brisbane. When I arrived in Australia I stayed at Brisbane for the first 10 days and then later I moved to Toowoomba. One of my Korean friend who lives in there recommended me that I could get a job.
Unfortunately I wasn't able to get a job in Toowoomba although I've been living there for 3 months. But why do i like Toowoomba? The first reason is that I met great friends in Toowoomba.
When I arrived in there, my friends threw a party for me. I haven't experienced going to a party so I was excited at that time, and they always help me, just like in going to market, in going to a company to submit my resume. That is because I don't have any car and driver's license. I like Toowoomba even if it is expensive to live there and there is always traffic and all those things.
the second reason is the USQ (University of Southern Queensland). USQ has a Korean and Australian society. We call KATS (Korea Australia Toowoomba Society). Every Tuesday I went to the club and met a lot of Australian people. Sometimes one of my friends in there would invite the group members to their house for a dinner. I was able to experience real Australian life while I lived in Toowoomba.
But I had to move to another city because I ldon't have money anymore and i need to get a job.
Before I went back to Korea I visited in Toowoomba to meet my friends. They gave a welcome back party for me. How can I forget them and the place?
That's why Toowoomba is my favorite place in Australia.