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My home town hometown

My home town hometown is Hanoi where which is a the captital of Vietnam and it's quite close with me and my family. Like many others other cities, Hanoi is expanding expanded/ being expanded/ has been expanded, (dấu chấm tách câu) it's more stately and calmer quiet and peaceful than Ho Chi Minh city with free lined boulevards and large colonia colonial ? villas, many of which are now embassies embassy or government buildings. Hanoi is surrounded by also has ? many craft villages, each specialising in specific tranditional craft. Some places where are beautiful in Hanoi, have more impression for everyone such as: Hoan Kiem lake, the older quarter in center Hanoi are throng with people throughout everyday. Van Mieu is a the temple of literature that dates back to the 11 century and the oldest university in Vietnam.
"pho" is typical dish of Hanoi people and it's been existing for a long time. Pho is prepared not only in a sophisticated manner but also in the technique which is required to have sweet but pure bouillon, soft but not crashded noodle, soft and sweet smelling meat. Only in cold days, having a hot and sweet smelling bowl of "pho" to enjoy would make you experience the complete flavour of special dish of Hanoi.