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please, check the picture I uploaded.. the original version is type and the other is the picture.. BEFORE THE PRESENTATION Paragraph 1: JUST, ALREADY, YET Today is Friday and I just finished my classes at university. I've already planned my weekend. On Saturday I'm going to see all my best friends, I don't know yet what we are going to do, but for sure we are definitely going to have a lot of fun. I've already made reservations in Mochica's Restaurant for Sunday, because it's my mother's birthday. I've just bought present for her. My nephew Diego hasn't bought any present yet. Paragraph 2: CRIME Last week, when I was at home I saw through the window a woman waiting for a taxi. Suddenly I saw five men who stole her mobile phone. I noticed that the woman was really scared and I decided to call the police. They came immediately and shot at the sky. The criminals fell down to the floor and handed the phone to the police. The police gave back the mobile phone to the woman. She was very grateful. Luckily no one was hurt. AFTER PRESENTATION (I uploaded a picture, please check.. ) I UPLOADED A PIC WHERE MY TEACHER TOLD ME I HAVE MISTAKE :( please, could you check my mistake and tell me where is wrong.. :(

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please, check the picture I uploaded.. the original version is type and the other is the picture..

BEFORE THE PRESENTATION
Paragraph 1: JUST, ALREADY, YET
Today is Friday and I just finished my classes at university. I've already planned my weekend. On Saturday, I'm going to see all of my best friends. I don't know yet what we are going to do, but I know for sure, that we are definitely going to have a lot of fun. I've already made reservations in Mochica's Restaurant for Sunday, because it's my mother's birthday. I've just bought a present for her. My nephew Diego hasn't boughtpurchased any presents yet.

Paragraph 2: CRIME
Last week when I was at home, I saw through the window a woman waiting for a taxi. Suddenly, I saw five men who stole steal her mobile phone. I noticed that the woman was really scared and I decided to call the police. They came immediately and shot at the sky. The criminals fell down to the floor and handed the phone to the police. The police gave back the mobile phone to the woman. She was very grateful. Luckily, no one was hurt.

AFTER PRESENTATION (I uploaded a picture, please check.. )

I UPLOADED A PIC WHERE MY TEACHER TOLD ME I HAVE MISTAKE :(

 

You did a great job! Keep up the good work. I just made a few little corrections that I thought helped with the flow and transition.

please, could you check my mistake and tell me where is wrong.. :(

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yes. but when you say: "I just bought a present for her" ... I think is "I've just bought a present for her" using the present perfect... I'm confuse.. :(
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The biggest mistake that I see in the photo has to do with the presents/your mom's bday. It should be something like this:(I capitalized the major changes - so keep in mind none of it should actually be in caps for your presentation): I've already made reservations AT Mochica's Restaurant for next Sunday because it is my mother's birthday. I JUST bought A present for her. My nephew Diego STILL hasn't bought her A gift yet. oh and then this sounds more natural: I don't know what we're going to do yet, but for sure we're going to have a lot of fun. Does that help at all Max??

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