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A touching of the quake
The 7.0-magnitude earthquake that struck Ya'an city, Sichun Province. The quake has so far killed at least 193 people and injured more than 12,200 others.
Affectingly, there was a 8-yeas-old boy who saved his 2-yeas-old sister by himself.when the earthquake happened, his little sister was buried in the earth,he dug had been digging for
hours ," I thought nothing but wanted to save my little sister" No matter what injured his body.
Finally, he heard her creying , at that moment , "I was full of power..."
Hello Lily, I was so sorry to hear of this tragedy. Your story confirms that even against the highest odds we should never give up hope.
I have offered a few amendments to your text as follows:
'A Touching of the Quake
The 7.0-magnitude earthquake that struck Ya'an city, Sichun Province, has, so far, killed at least 193 people and injured more than 12,200 others. Touchingly, there was an eight year old boy who, by his own efforts, saved his two-year old sister. After the earthquake struck, his little sister was buried in the earth. He dug and dug for hours. " I thought nothing but wanted to save my little sister" he said, no matter what injuries to his body. Finally, he heard her crying. At that moment, he said, "I was full of power..." '
Hope this has been of help.
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