Admissions Essay part2 ~ pleas help me with corrections :)
Fashion is a instant language ; fashion is a lifestyle ; fashion is how you present yourself today.
With my sunglasses on, I’m Jack Nicholson. Without them, I’m fat and 60.
- Jack Nicholson
For me, without my clothing, I am just a unconfident and ordinary asian girl. I truly believed that different clothing can present different personality. So, I want to become a theatre costume designer and work in a team. I know it is not easy, but there is no easy way to makes dream come true. I will keep trying and never give up.
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Admissions Essay Part 2 ~ Please help me with corrections. :)
Fashion is an instant language; fashion is a lifestyle; fashion is how you present yourself today.
"With my sunglasses on, I’m Jack Nicholson. Without them, I’m fat and 60."
- Jack Nicholson
For me, without my clothing, I am just an unconfident and ordinary asian girl. I truly believe that different clothing can present a different personality. So, I want to become a theatre costume designer and work in a team. I know it is not easy, but there is no easy way to make dreams come true. I will keep trying and never give up.
Don't forget quotation marks when using direct quotes. Also, the punctuation goes directly after the word, then leave a space.
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