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The hurricane warning! 3 Eventually, my friends and I were taken out side of the sea by the safety guards who leaded us to they office and frightened us how dangerous the hurricane was. At that time we pretended to be good children and nodded them courteously but that's not the end. After hurricane, I woke up early in the morning and went hunting on the side. When I reached the beach, I couldn't believe my eyes what I was seeing. The beach was full of sea creature that I had never seen before. I thought as if I was seeing treasure trove on the beach. I circulated among sea creatures and took several curiosities. There was a enormous amount of shell and seaweed even I could see a few sea horses. Not only there were sea creatures but several animals, little pigs, puppies, calves, and chickens those were already dead. Further more lots of rubbish, household goods arrived from somewhere. At the end I carried several objects to school and gave it to my friends and I made a promise my friends to take them to the beach when hurricane comes again...

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Wow, exciting!
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Thanks for your comment^^
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1. us to there ... us to their (of course) 2. were taken out side of the sea were escorted out of the surf - the sea is the vastness, the surf is the breaking waves there at your beach 3. frightened us warned us or cautioned us 4 went hunting - hunting is not quite right went fossicking, went exploring
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The hurricane warning! 3

Eventually, my friends and I were taken out side of the sea by the safety guards who leaded us to there there office and frightened us (by telling us ) how dangerous the hurricane was. At that time we pretended to be good children and nodded at them courteously but that's not the end. After the hurricane, I woke up early in the morning and went hunting on the side shore. When I reached the beach, I couldn't believe my eyes!what I was seeing. The beach was full of sea creature that I had never seen before. I thought  felt as if I was seeing a treasure trove on the beach. I circulated walked among the sea creatures and took several curiosities. There was an enormous amount of shell and seaweed  I could even see a few sea horses. Not only were there  sea creatures but several animals, little pigs, puppies, calves, and chickens those were already dead. Further more lots of rubbish such as household goods  had arrived from somewhere. At the end I carried several objects to school and gave them to my friends and I made a promise to my friends to take them to the beach when the hurricane comes again...

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Thanks, If you are good at English please correct it ^^ I need someone's help...

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