TASK 1-2

The graph illustrates information about the number of visits to Music Choice and Pop Parade on the web respectively. There are striking differences in the development trend for both of the two sites.

Specifically, starting from 120,000 people on the first day, the number of visits to Music Choice plummeted to only 40,000 people on the ninth day, with some ups and downs in between. From the that point onward, the figure experienced a drastic rise to roughly 150,000 people on the eleventh day before a sharp decrease decreasing to 80,000 on the thirteenth day. After that, the number of visits continued to increase dramatically and reached the highest point at of roughly 170,000 people on the fifteenth day.

However, the number of visits to Pop Parade saw a quite different trend. To be exact Specifically, starting from 40,000 people on the first day, the figure dropped to 20,000 on the fourth day, with some fluctuations in between. It is surprising to note from the graph that, between the fourth day and eleventh day, the number of visits fluctuated around 20,000 to 40,000 people. From the that point onward, it saw a sharp rise to 120,000 people on the twelfth day. After that, it experienced a slight fluctuation and ended up at roughly 80,000 on the fifth day.

Very good job!  The writing was almost perfect.  The corrections that I made aren't things that have to be changed, but they do make the writing flow a little more smoothly.