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please examine my essay. ~! A thought provoking issue concern the way to get information. Some people believe that television have affected people's lives greater than books. Let us examine the truthfulness of this belief. for the following reasons, I personally prefer to get informations from books. because book's information are more reliable than television. First, television is not reliable resource to get information. Nowadays we are living flooding of information because of latest technology. and this also included uncertified sources. For example, I watched a beauty program, It introduced a way to cleaning face. The way was use of milk, when cleaning face, so i did, and I get terrible troubles. So, I could not help my self to meet a facial doctor. This example shows, that the television have indefiniteness informations Second, viewing television a lot can bring about addictness. It can liken a fast-food. everyone knows that fast-food can damage to health. but we can not turn to right side. And we all too familiar such cheap information and falling in so fast. This may sound old-fashioned way. but it is true. So, I am willing to participate to reading book. Please do not hesitate to mention to give your advice to me that approve my writing skills!

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please examine my essay. ~!

A thought provoking issue concerns the way of getting information. Some people believe that television has affected people's lives greater than books. Let us examine the truthfulness of this belief. For the following reasons, I personally prefer to get information from books.  The information in books is more reliable than the information on television.

First, television is not a reliable resource to get information. Nowadays we are living flooded with information because of the latest technology. And this also includes unreliable sources. For example, I watched a beauty program and it introduced a way to wash your face. The method was to use milk for face washing. So I did that, and I  had some terrible problems. I ended up having to meet with a facial doctor. This example shows that the information on television is indefinite. 

Second, viewing television a lot can lead to addiction. It can be like fast-food. Everyone knows that fast-food can damage health.  But we still can't turn back to the right side. We are all too familiar with such cheap information, and we're stuck in this pattern. This may sound old-fashioned, but it is true. So, I am willing to read books.



Please do not hesitate to mention to give your advice to me that approve my writing skills!

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