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Screaming for B.A.P. I think that if I write a notebook everyday for whatever story I can improve my writing skill right? So start this notebook by today's Korean boy-band concert. That Korean boy-band I will talk about is call B.A.P. Including of 6 handsome members hahahaha They debut in 2012 and today they have their first concert! I mean their solo concert that perform only themselves not joint concert with many artists on the stage. I followed fan account by twitter. I'm screamed a lot in front of my computer when I read many fan accounts from babies. (Their fan club named as Baby) I wanna go there to support and watch their grow-up very much but I can't So I hope there will be their concert in Thailand. I promise I will go to sing and dance with them for sure! ^o^ When the concert has end, some babies post many preview pictures of B.A.P. I'm like crying in front of my computer again because 1 of 6 members. He's call Himchan. He got injured about 3 weeks ago by fell down the floor while getting in a car. So his 2 finger break (what's word I should use for this sentence?) and he will be in plaster cast for awhile. He disappear from that day until today me and many babies saw him again in this concert! T____T I feel like happy and sad in the same time. Happy because I saw him again after his disappear for mostly a month and sad because I saw his arm still splinting and hold by black sling. (I mean it's made from black cloth hold his arm and has sling hang on his neck) < What should I call for this sentence? I hope he will get well soon and perform their lives or concert with powerful and intention continually. I think I should end my notebook now seem it's so long. hahaha

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Screaming for B.A.P.

I think that if I write a notebook everyday for whatever story, I can improve my writing skill - right?
So I am starting this notebook by writing about today's Korean boy-band concert.

That Korean boy-band I will talk about is call B.A.P.  The group is made up of 6 handsome members. hahahaha
They debuted in 2012 and today they have their first concert!
I mean their solo concert, in which only they perform only themselves, not a joint concert with many artists on the stage.
I followed their fan account by twitter. I'm screamed a lot in front of my computer when I read many fan accounts from babies. (Their fan club named as "Baby")
I want to go there to support and watch them grow up very much, but I can't,
so I hope they will hold a concert in Thailand. I promise I will go to sing and dance with them for sure! ^o^

When the concert ended, some babies posted many preview pictures of B.A.P.
I was crying in front of my computer again, because of 1 of the 6 members.
He's call Himchan. He got injured about 3 weeks ago, when he fell down onto the floor while getting in a car. Two of his fingers were broken (what's word I should use for this sentence?) and he will be in a plaster cast for awhile.
He disappeared from that day until today me and many babies saw him again in this concert! T____T
I feel both happy and sad at the same time. Happy because I saw him again after his disappearance for mostly a month and sad because I saw his arm still splinted and held by a black sling. (I mean it's made from black cloth hold his arm and has a sling hanging on his neck) < What should I call for this sentence? [His arm was in a black sling.]
I hope he will get well soon and get on with their lives and continue to perform in concert with power and strong intention.


I think I should end my notebook now seems it's so long. hahaha

 

[Very good.  Your meaning was clear.  Remember your articles (a,an,the) and your tenses.  It was not too long.]

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get better soon** ^^"
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OMG i'm super fan of B.A.P too !! i really feel sorry for himchan oppa.. i hope he will get soon~

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