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Travel broaden our mind Upon the benefit of travel,people share a common view that it relaxes our body and broaden our mind.As to me,I can't agree more with them.Travel should,undoubtedly,be an dispensable of our life. On the one hand,we can learn something about geographical,historical,cultural,regional knowledge from traveling experience.When we visit some places,we will communicate with local people,eat local food.These experiences are helpful for our study in the future. On the other hand,we are given more experience by travel.We can consider something from different perspectives.Because we have gone to many places,talked with variety of people,experienced all kinds of life so that we can understand somthing easlier. So based on the above discussion,there is no doubt that travel is beneficial to our minds with the knowledge,experiences.

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Travel broadens our minds

Upon the benefit of travel, people share a common view that it relaxes our body and broadens our minds. As for me, I can't agree more with them. Travel should, undoubtedly, be an dispensable part of our life.
On the one hand, we can learn something about geographical, historical, cultural and regional knowledge from traveling experience. When we visit some places, we will communicate with local people and eat local food. These experiences are helpful for our study in the future.
On the other hand, we are given more experience by travel. We can consider something from different perspectives. Because we have gone to many places, talked with variety of people and experienced all kinds of life, so that we can understand somthing easlier.
So based on the above discussion, there is no doubt that travel is beneficial to our minds with the knowledge and experiences.

 

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