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Sunflower You came suddenly one day, came into this tragic world; and so you were destined to be lonely, though the world is so bright and bustling. One day you will feel lost, just as I have been. Don’t be sad or lose your way; the twists and turns are what make life meaningful. If you can, if you’re able, you must become that beautiful sunflower, against the cold wind and bitter rain of pain and suffering, blossoming with tenacity and glory.

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Sunflower

You came suddenly one day,
came into this tragic world;
and so you were destined to be lonely,
though the world is so bright and bustling.
One day you will feel lost,
just as I have been.
Don’t be sad or lose your way;
the twists and turns are what make life meaningful.
If you can, if you’re able,
you must become that beautiful sunflower,
against the cold wind and bitter rain of pain and suffering,
blossoming with tenacity and glory.

 

That was beautifully written, Jane!  Some things about English grammar are personal taste.  I prefer to avoid contractions in more formal writing. "Do not be sad or lose your way" sounds more expressive and lyrical than "Don't be sad...."  The same goes for "If you can, if you are able,".

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Until the slugs eat you

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