Very nice   composition.

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,.... beautiful .....

[It is ] not beauty that makes love;  but love makes beauty.  beautiful women,

[Women who are beautiful in character, rather than women who beautify ...] not women who beautify her  [their]  face with makeup.]

[A]  beautiful woman is, [remove comma] a kind woman and smiling.

Then behave like that, so I and everyone can call you ' BEAUTIFUL ''

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    I have always felt that way also.   I cannot always account for when I suggest changes, or simply make them.  Sometimes I do not want to "correct" what a foreign student writes because I can perfectly understand the meaning, and it is the meaning that I value the most, rather than a grammatical correctness.

   I enjoy essays like this, because they reflect genuine  "feeling".---Warm Regards,  Bruce