Hello Eupatrid.

  Let's look at this text,  make a few minor changes, and  write about it. Okay?

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"I am I'm love with lady gaga

It seems very amazing that I love Gaga rather than other singers or stars;

but since 2008,   I have learnt a lot from her.She is truly brave to be herself.

I want to be like her.  While my situation at present is that I have to work and study all day and all night for  gaining admittance to key colleges in China,  I really get into trouble,  because I am not typical at all."

  [This would be a good place for a paragraph break, I think.]

    i don't want to stay in the classroom, listening to the teachers without being encouraged to find information  and think  for myself.

 [Remember to write of yourself as a SINGULARITY.   If you start writing about an  "ourselves" you shift the authorship to a PLURALITY, and all of your  "I's" would have to be changed to WE]

   "I  find that Gaga can just give me the power to be myself.

I just wanna"   [Here you are choosing to use a colloquialism, or  American "slang".

You can do that,  but for written work, there are specific reasons to avoid the slang unless you are  also writing it as part of "being yourself"  and rebelling against literary conventions.   You might write  "want to"  to conform to a grammatical standard.]

 [So you were writing.....]  "I just wanna   be myself and I want you to love me for who I am.   I am my hair.  Right?"  [ No, to be specific, unless you confuse entirely, your physicality for your "being".    For example, you write in error if you believe that:

(a) Bruce does not already "love" you.

 (b) Bruce does not love you for your Mind or Invisible Soul.

   This is the kind of conceptual difficulty that one gets into with a materialistic premise, wherein one presumes to be   hair, skin,  muscle and bones only.

 You do not realize it yet, perhaps, but that kind of materialistic philosophy actually confuses "love" with "desire" or "lust".   Lady Gaga, epitomizes desire,  if anything with her graphic sensuality.  Thus far,  the issues have only barely been touched upon, but let's look at the rest of your  exciting essay on the subject.]

  "Sometimes I want to escape from being forced to learn.  I should be myself?"

[Yes, and this is a common feeling in regard to state or government sponsored  public education, at all levels.  In fact,  You may see from time to time that I have criticized some written essays, for the continual use of "Sweeping Generalizations" and compositions utterly devoid of facts.  This may be the consequence of state and government sponsored public education all over the world.   In an age of Science, it is amazing how many students in many countries, have learned to think and write in nothing more than the "Glittering Generalities" that are so often associated with  state sponsored Propaganda.   Let's write these sentences like this:]

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"Sometimes I want to escape from being forced to learn.    Should I not just be myself?"

   [I have one student who,  prior to meeting me,  entirely taught herself English fluency, by watching music videos on  on public websites. She has also learned many other subjects  by studying such videos.  But let's move past this most interesting issue to see what else your essay addresses, my friend.]

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"Should I, or must I only  do as the teacher tells?"

[Indeed.  The great casualty of public education is truth itself; but so long as people prefer to  be told how to think and what to think and learn in this way in tedious classroom scenarios,  that is all "education" will be to them.  There is some hope however, that the Internet will change the necessity for "Brick and Mortar" schools, and we can all learn to communicate  according to our innate talents.

Yours is for writing and thinking and questioning.  Let's look further at what you have examined.]

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"I am not brave enough to break the rules.  [This has a period, so it is the end of the sentence and a complete thought.  If you want to continue the sentence, you must use a SEMICOLON;  followed by "but".  I chose to end the sentence, so lets dress up your next sentence, shall we?]

    "At night,    [keep a space, after the comma and before the next word]

"I know that I am brave enough to cross the ocean. I am a soldier tonight.

I  am still curious and willing to learn more about the world.

That's what I am proud of. No  matter how bad tomorrow is,  I am sure I will move forward without hesitation.  Lady Gaga is just my spirit."

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[Awesome. Your concluding paragraph contains powerful affirmations.

We may note that for the moment, you identify with Lady Gaga and her sensuality, as representative of "your spirit".   However, it may be wise to keep in mind that Lady Gaga does not represent much more than a senusality in  fact.

If she does represent a specific ideology or philosophy, it remains  vague,  as it is with so many public "entertainers".    The idea being that senuality is only a form of human expression.  It is not "the answer" to anything in specific, other than sensual feelings."]

   You can write so much more on this, I think, if you seriously study the issues.

  Very well  done my friend--Warm Regards,  Bruce