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Strong Wind Causes Massive Power Outage - please correct
The Utility companies have been dealing with the aftermath (effects) [1] of the [2] strong hurricane in Anapa and Novorossiysk. The [2] strong winds knocked down power grids, leaving more than 250,000 people without electricity. A strong northeast wind had caused one of the most massive power blackouts ever to occur on the Black Sea coast. This super storm will certainly go down as the greatest ever to hit the area in the last 15 years, the meteorologists [3] reported. What will be the cost of the repairs has not been determined yet, but damages are estimated to be in the millions of dollars (rubles??). [4]
Excellently written.
Here are a few comments:
[1] Both "aftermath" and "effects" are correct. Here, though, "aftermath" is the perfect choice, because the word specifically refers to the consequences or "effects" of a disaster or misfortune.
[2] The definite article "the" is appropriate in both places only if the reader is expected to already know about the hurricane and its strong winds. If that is not the case, then the indefinite article "a" should be used.
[3] "weather people" is too informal a phrase, and is usually used to describe the people we see on TV who give the weather forecast. "meteorologist" is the word we would expect to see in a serious discussion of such a serious event.
[4] "we are talking about" and "multimillions" sound too informal in such a serious article.
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