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While I was doing my exercise this morning (swimming) Talking about exercise that I love to do. Life style had been change time after time. In Indonesia, there are a lot of place to do some exercise, gym, and so on. The big 3 are Fitness First, Celebrity Fitness and Gold's Gym. I have tried them (free trial, it's like 7-14 days free) but perhaps I feel I'm not fit in them. So, I still doing my old exercise methods: SWIMMING. The reason why I love swimming than the others is 1. I feel enjoy and relax. 2. The water that (touch?) my body is cooling and refresh me. 3. I feel like I'm so free that I don't need to lift my own body-> the water pressure helps me to do it. 4. And I don't feel too tired at all. 5. Last, I think it the safest way to do exercise, you won't get hurt because of (tools?) or ankle. It's just water that absolutely wouldn't hurt you, UNLESS(means=except?) you can't swim, you will be drowned... and the worst case, you'll dead?! but it wouldn't happen as long as the life guard watch on you. ^^ **Please correct my article and give some advise if there are better combination of word in the passage. Thanks before Tia-

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While I was doing my exercise this morning (swimming), I thought of talking about the exercise that I love to do. 


Life style had has been changing time after time.
In Indonesia, there are a lot of places to do some exercise in, such as  gyms., and so on.

The biggest 3 are Fitness First, Celebrity Fitness and Gold's Gym.
I have tried them (free trial, it's like  about 7-14 days free), but perhaps I feel I'm I don't fit in them.

So, I still doing my old exercise methods: SWIMMING.
The reasons why I love swimming more than the others is are:
1. I feel enjoy it and relax.
2. The water that (touch?) touches my body is cooling and refreshing me.
3. I feel like I'm so free that I don't need to lift my own body, the water pressure helps me to do it.
4. And I don't feel too very tired at all.
5. Last, I think it's the safest way to do exercise to do, you won't get hurt by tools. because of (tools?) or ankle. It's just water that absolutely wouldn't won't hurt you. UNLESS(means=except?) However, if you can't swim, you will be drowned...  drown and, in the worst case, you'll dead?! die, but it that wouldn't happen as long as the life guard watch on spots you. ^^

**Please correct my article and give some advise if there are better combination of word in the passage.

Thanks before

Tia-

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