give my composition correcttion and leave your comment,thxs! Ummmm，why so many guys gave me thumb down,what's wrong with y'all and me? had my fault affended you or something? i am just joking on my past and myselft!!!maybe you think it's kind of disgusting to read my shitty words,but that's ok！because I am just kidding！ ps：what do you think about this short composition?