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Feel time always push me go ahead Do you remember,when you were a child,you were really captivated by the beauty of this world?a delicate flower,a crystal dew,a gorgeous sunset...... I remember,when I was a child,how I was drawed and curious when I saw a crowd of tiny ants protecting their home from the attack of a crowd of large ants.I watched this interesting battle with all my attention, as if both of that two crowds are bridle-wise troops: the large ones seemed like the royal army when the tiny ones folk.I saw under some sondless commands,the large ones marched ahead orderly to the hole of the tiny one's nest,the tiny ones seemed powerless but indomitable,they went out to face their enemy with all their strength.I didn't know what they were fight for,I certainly would make it out if a naughty boy didn't destroy the scene with his feet. I still remember a charming afternoon of my middle school's life.Although at that time we were under enormous pressure,I could always find a way to keep my heart calm.And at that afternoon in a self-study class,when the classmates around me striving to their study,I snatched a little leisure from that busy life,releasing my eyes and my heart out of the window.Suddenly,a lovely sparrow bursted in my view and drawed my attention.at that time,the genial setting sun poured its golden shine softly upon the stairs,this bird started leaping jumping up the stairs,one by one,concentrative and happy. my sight and my heart followed her closely till she disappeared.my heart was in her world and filled with happiness.this little bird coldn't perceive that its simple active was bringing the eyes of a person such a enjoyable feast,making a heart leap with its vivace jumps. I am a person with rich affection,I love walking slowly,enjoying the sunshine and the beautiful view on the way.but now,I feel that I am always pushed ahead by the time and couldn't stop my hurried steps,and what annoys me more is that,although I know time is valuable,I waste time,not on enjoying the life,but doing the meaningless thing.

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Feel time always push me go ahead

Always feels like time is pushing me forwards

 

Do you remember,when you were a child,you were really captivated by the beauty of this world?a delicate flower,a crystal dew,a gorgeous sunset......

Can you remember, as a child, being captivated by the beauty of the world? A delicate flower, a crystal dew, a gorgeous sunset?


I remember,when I was a child,how I was drawed and curious when I saw a crowd of tiny ants protecting their home from the attack of a crowd of large ants.

When I was a child, I can remember one time when I saw a colony of small ants defending their nest from attack by an enemy colony of larger ants.

 

I watched this interesting battle with all my attention, as if both of that two crowds are bridle-wise troops: the large ones seemed like the royal army when the tiny ones folk.

I watched this battle unfold with great interest, it was as if the two colonies representeddifferent clans: the large ants as the royalists, against the small ants as the people's forces.

 

I saw under some sondless commands,the large ones marched ahead orderly to the hole of the tiny one's nest,the tiny ones seemed powerless but indomitable,they went out to face their enemy with all their strength.

I witnessed, under soundless commands, the larger ants marching ahead orderly towards the hole of the nest. In the face of such strength the small ants seemed powerless, but they fought on with all their might.

 

I didn't know what they were fight for,I certainly would make it out if a naughty boy didn't destroy the scene with his feet.

Although I didn't know for what this battle was fought over, I surely would have worked it out had a naughty boy not come along and destroyed the scene with his feet.


I still remember a charming afternoon of my middle school's life.Although at that time we were under enormous pressure,I could always find a way to keep my heart calm.And at that afternoon in a self-study class,when the classmates around me striving to their study,I snatched a little leisure from that busy life,releasing my eyes and my heart out of the window.

I can still recall one charming afternoon during middle school. During this period, despite feeling enormous pressure, I was always able to find ways to keep calm. In that afternoon whilst in a self-study class, with classmates all around me striving to study, I briefly snatched a little leisure from my busy life, and released my eyes and my mind from the books to gaze out of the window.

 

Suddenly,a lovely sparrow bursted in my view and drawed my attention.at that time,the genial setting sun poured its golden shine softly upon the stairs,this bird started leaping jumping up the stairs,one by one,concentrative and happy.
my sight and my heart followed her closely till she disappeared.my heart was in her world and filled with happiness.this little bird coldn't perceive that its simple active was bringing the eyes of a person such a enjoyable feast,making a heart leap with its vivace jumps.

Suddenly, a lovely sparrow burst into view and drew my attention. The setting sun was pouring its golden shine upon the staircase outside, and the little bird lapped it up, leping up the stairs one by one, focussed and content. My gaze and concentration followed her closely until she was out of sight, and for a moment my heart was with her, feeling the happiness. This small bird could not have understood that its simple actions could have brought such a feast of joy to its observer, making my heart leap along with its boisterous jumps.


I am a person with rich affection,I love walking slowly,enjoying the sunshine and the beautiful view on the way.but now,I feel that I am always pushed ahead by the time and couldn't stop my hurried steps,and what annoys me more is that,although I know time is valuable,I waste time,not on enjoying the life,but doing the meaningless thing.

I am someone who holds deep affection for simple things in life, such as walking, the sunshine, and beautiful scenery. However, nowadays I feel like I am being pushed ahead by time, unable to control my hurried steps. What annoys me most of all is that I understand how precious time is, but I spend it not on enjoyment, but instead waste it on meaningless things.

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I reread my entry,and feel it is naive,like written by a schoolchild.who can help me correct it?

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