My Application :)

Hii :)
It would be REALLY nice if someone could please correct my application ^^
I don't know much about the company and the job, because it's a work placement which is financed by an EU programme and my teacher just told me it has something to do with computers......so here's the masterpiece xD jk :)
it's my first one x)
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My address



The company's address



08 October 2012

Dear Sir/ Madam

RE: Work Experience placement at xx Company

I am writing to enquire whether you would be willing to offer me the opportunity to do work
experience in your company.

The school work experience programme next year is from xx to xx 2013.
In school I'm learning detailed how to work with computers and different programmes.

I believe that the placement would really help me in my prospective career and also it would be a great possibility for me to improve my English.
Besides I'm a quick learner, so I can understand things well enough in a timely manner.
Furthermore, I like to work with people and I am really looking forward to getting to know the Irish culture.

If you have any questions or would like further information please do not hesitate to contact me.
You can call me at home after 5 pm on xxxxxxxx.


Thank you for considering my request. I am looking forward to your reply.


Yours faithfully,

ME :)


WOW! :P The application is really good and well written apart from a few minor errors (not a problem). It's written well and rather good considering English can be hard for a German to learn!!! Regards, Curtis :)

My Application :)

Hii :)
It would be REALLY nice if someone could please correct my application ^^
I don't know much about the company and the job, because it's a work placement which is financed by an EU programme and my teacher just told me it has something to do with computers......so here's the masterpiece xD jk :)
it's my first one x)
________________________________________________________________
My address



The companys address



08 October 2012

Dear Sir/ Madam

RE: Work Experience placement at xx Company

I am writing to enquire whether you would be willing to offer me the opportunity to do work experience in your company.

The school work experience programme next year is from xx to xx 2013.
In school I'm learning in detail, how to work with computers and different programmes.

I believe that the placement would really help me in my prospective career and also it would be a great possibility for me to improve my English.
Besides, I'm a quick learner so I can understand things well enough in a timely manner.
Furthermore, I like to work with people and I am really looking forward to get to know the Irish culture.

If you have any questions or would like further information please do not hesitate to contact me.
You can call me at home after 5 pm on xxxxxxxx.


Thank you for considering my request. I am looking forward to your reply.


Yours faithfully,

ME :)

Good job!

________________________________________________________________




The companys address



08 October 2012

Dear Sir/ Madam

RE: Work Experience placement at xx Company

I am writing to enquire whether you would be willing to offer me the opportunity to do work and obtain 
experience in your company.

The school work experience programme is next year is from xx to xx 2013.
In school I'm learning detailed how to work with computers and different programmes.

I believe that the placement would really help me in my prospective career and also it would be a great possibility for me to improve my English.
I'm a quick learner so I can understand things well enough in a timely manner.
Furthermore, I like working with people and I am really looking forward to get to know the Irish culture.

If you have any questions or would like further information please do not hesitate to contact me.
You can call me at home after 5 pm on xxxxxxxx.


Thank you for considering my request. I am looking forward to your reply.


Yours faithfully,

ME :)