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what happened The national day has just finnished which mean the vacation should end up.With a lot of pity I pack up my baggage and prepare to back to school.obviously,this vacation is really unforgettable experience.mooncake day means I can reunited with family and have a good time.my mom make a magnificient dinner for me which make me touch.I can't meet my cousins cause they are in Austrialia.I haven't seen them for nearly 2 years which make me lost There always are other good things happend.the Chian Voice championship night made me can't sleep.When I saw so many talent competitors sing on the stage i tried to imitate them and scream out loud all the time.what happend?I take until I was hoarse.And what bother me and other studens,actually not only students is China and Japan's Fight.today I heard news the navy's 7 worships has acorssed okinawa.Oh A little too much brimstone for me.But i don't want to talk about politcs.what ever happened it can't stop me I like the girl grpup akb48.haha The unplesant thing is the trafic accident has take 6 Germany's life due to terrible trafic.We are so soory for that and pray for them.It's time to dinner and after dinner I will prepare for my Engish contest.That'all.

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What Happened

The national day has just finnished which means that vacation should end up is ending. With a lot of pity a heavy heart, I pack up my baggage and prepare to go back to school. Obviously, this vacation is was a truly unforgettable experience. For mooncake day means I can I was able to be reunited with family and have a good time. My mom made a magnificient dinner for me which make me touch was touching. I can't couldn't meet my cousins because they are in Austrialia. I haven't seen them for nearly 2 years which make me lost which makes me feel lost.
There were other good things that happened. The Chian Voice championship during the night made me can't sleep kept me awake. When I saw so many talented competitors sing on the stage I tried to imitate them and scream out loud all the time. What happened? I tried until I was hoarse. Today I heard news that the navy's 7 warships have crossed Okinawa. Oh, that's a little too much brimstone for me (What do you mean by brimstone? The expression 'fire and brimstone' is only used in a religious context). But I don't want to talk about politics. Whatever happened it can't stop me I like the girl grpup akb48. haha (What does the girl group have to do with politics?)
I heard an unpleasant story about a traffic accident that took the life of six Germans. We are so sorry for that and pray for them. It's time for dinner and after dinner I will prepare for my Engish contest. That's all.

 

Be careful the check spelling and punctuation, I found many grammatical errors. Also watch for past and present tense. You have a tendency to jump thoughts before completing them, make sure you explain yourself thoroughly. Keep practicing! :)

 

NOTE: And what bothers me and other students, actually not only students is China and Japan's Fight (I omitted this because I don't know what you're trying to say here and can't correct it).

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